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Misty Mourning Ch. 1 Ep. 3

by Wr3n


Chapter 1.3: Mason

It’s Sunday morning, or afternoon I suppose, and I’m stuck inside of school. I stand in front of the gate to Venice High chewing the gum I’ve had all morning. I take my hands out of the pocket of my hoodie and walk inside. I’m greeted with the chatter of around thirty other kids, who all turn to look at me with the clack of the closing gate.

Their gazes send a chill up my spine. I walk over to the crowd as the chatter slowly picks back up.

“Students!” The administrator says. “I’m going to call attendance now, everyone please be quiet!” So, she starts calling names down a list. Followed by students shouting back, Here, they say. Until she gets to my name. “Melanie Corbin?”

“Mason.” I correct, “Mason Corbin.”

She clears her throat, “Hm, yes,” she says as she marks something down on her clipboard. Once she’s finished reading off the list, she instructs up to go inside and find an empty classroom to study in. Some students begin to laugh and joke with their friends, which tells me that most of these kids won’t be studying.

I turn to go find a quiet place to hang around for the next hour–probably a bathroom of sorts–before I hear a voice behind me.

“Hello,” it says, “I’m Florence.” Her voice is soft, I spin around to look at her. She has dark blonde hair put into pigtails that hang over either of her shoulders. Paired with a plaid skirt and a white cardigan, she doesn’t seem the type to be here.

“Mason,” I respond uncomfortably, “Can I help you?”

“I saw you walk in earlier, I was wondering if you’d come study with me?”

I think for a moment, then respond, “Sure, Florence.” So much for a quiet evening.

Once all other students have dispersed, Florence directs for us to head inside. I follow her lead, and we end up on the stairwell. She begins to climb, so I follow suit. I assume we’ll be stopping at the second floor, but Florence continues up.

“Hey,” I say with a confused grin. She stops and turns to look at me, “Where are we going, exactly?”

She gives an unsettling giggle, “To the rooftop, silly.” I reluctantly continue up, quickly matching her pace.

As we reach the top of the stairs, Florence swings open the doors, hitting us with a cold gust of winter wind, revealing a large garden.

“Woah..” I whisper in amazement. My eyes widen as I take in the view.

“Yeah,” I hear Florence’s small voice next to me, “It’s beautiful, isn’t it? I used to come here with my partner every now and then. She planted these flowers. She graduated last year, so I’ve been maintaining them for her.”

“They’re lovely.” I remark, crouching down next to a purple flower near the doors.

I look over to Florence, who is standing in front of a particularly large rose bush. Her eyes are full of joy, it’s admirable. I stare at her for a while, until she turns to direct us to sit on a bench. It’s located near the fence separating us from the ledge, eerie. I stand and follow her to go sit.

We talk for a while, completely ignoring any responsibilities we may have. Just enjoying eachothers company. It’s been so long since I’ve been able to do that.

“So,” I say, “How’d you wound up here? You don’t really seem like the type to do anything outrageous.”

“You’re right,” She giggles again, “I’m not, just happen to be unlucky. A friend was giving me a piece of gum and we just happened to be seen.”

“Which teacher?”

“Miss Everheart.” She responds, “What about you? Why are you here?”

“A fight.”

“A fight?” She echoes.

“Yeah, some dude called me Melanie to provoke me so I punched him, then that escalated and, well, you know.”

“Oh,” She whispers, “Is he here too?”

“You bet he’s here too,” I chuckle.

We sit in comfortable silence for a moment, before I ask, “How come I’ve never seen you before?”

She thinks for a moment, “I’m not sure, probably because we don’t share any classes.”

I click my tongue, “Yeah, that’ll do it,” I laugh.

We sit for a bit longer before we hear the administrator calling all students to the gate over the intercom. We pack our things and head back down the stairs. We run into a few other students on our way, but not as many as I’d expect. I could have sworn more people were here an hour ago.

By the time we’re to the gate, the administrator has started re-taking attendance.

“Melanie Corbin,” she hollers.

“Mason,” I hear someone say, then I look beside me to see Florence with her arm raised. “Mason Corbin.” She corrects. I look at her with extreme amounts of gratitude in my eyes, and hope she doesn’t notice. I feel a smile creep onto my face, and the urge to cry becomes stronger.

“Right,” the administrator says. Whenever she finishes, she sets everyone free to go home.

“So,” Florence says, “I’ll see you around?”

“Yeah,” I smile, “I’ll see you.”

With that, we part ways. 


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If i may ask, i tought she was stuck in a building like a sky skarper or something like that. You forgot to explain how she got out of the building alive to beat up a guy in school. And anyway great story pls keep it up, waiting for more If i may ask, i tought she was stuck in a building like a sky skarper or something like that. You forgot to explain how she got out of the building alive to beat up a guy in school. And anyway great story pls keep it up, waiting for more episode soon.




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Hello! The main characters change between chapter, for example the one before this was for the character Vesper, while this one is from the point of view of Mason. I would also like to correct the pronouns, Mason goes by He/they. Thank you for your question and reading the story! Feel free to comment again if the confusion wasn't cleared.



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Hi names 22Midnight
hope your doing well, let's get into it!

First Impression: Okay this chapters in another persons point of view interesting, hopefully this gives my some answers of what happened to Elias and Vesper super worried about them especially Vesper.

It’s Sunday morning, or afternoon I suppose, and I’m stuck inside of school. I stand in front of the gate to Venice High chewing the gum I’ve had all morning. I take my hands out of the pocket of my hoodie and walk inside. I’m greeted with the chatter of around thirty other kids, who all turn to look at me with the clack of the closing gate.

Their gazes send a chill up my spine. I walk over to the crowd as the chatter slowly picks back up.


there in school, okay looking forward to seeing how this goes, i spot an introvert though definitely not a people person

“Students!” The administrator says. “I’m going to call attendance now, everyone please be quiet!” So, she starts calling names down a list. Followed by students shouting back, Here, they say. Until she gets to my name. “Melanie Corbin?”

“Mason.” I correct, “Mason Corbin.”


the teacher didn't even get Mason's name right ouch that's insulting that's one of her students

She clears her throat, “Hm, yes,” she says as she marks something down on her clipboard. Once she’s finished reading off the list, she instructs up to go inside and find an empty classroom to study in. Some students begin to laugh and joke with their friends, which tells me that most of these kids won’t be studying.


Yep the usual hustle of not wanting to do studies and just talk about fun stuff, but I can see Mason takes things a bit more seriously that's good because in a world like this when you don't have much time being serious is needed.

I turn to go find a quiet place to hang around for the next hour–probably a bathroom of sorts–before I hear a voice behind me.

“Hello,” it says, “I’m Florence.” Her voice is soft, I spin around to look at her. She has dark blonde hair put into pigtails that hang over either of her shoulders. Paired with a plaid skirt and a white cardigan, she doesn’t seem the type to be here.


yep go find a quiet place, wait who is this now, she looks pretty i wonder how this is going to go

“Mason,” I respond uncomfortably, “Can I help you?”

“I saw you walk in earlier, I was wondering if you’d come study with me?”

I think for a moment, then respond, “Sure, Florence.” So much for a quiet evening.


There making conversation okay and Mason is agreeing to go with her why do I feel like there is an agender to this probably because there always is

Once all other students have dispersed, Florence directs for us to head inside. I follow her lead, and we end up on the stairwell. She begins to climb, so I follow suit. I assume we’ll be stopping at the second floor, but Florence continues up.

“Hey,” I say with a confused grin. She stops and turns to look at me, “Where are we going, exactly?”

She gives an unsettling giggle, “To the rooftop, silly.” I reluctantly continue up, quickly matching her pace.


I see there is an agender I new it she's not going to study Mason turn back quickly before she leads you into some sort of death trap that your going to be stuck in later

As we reach the top of the stairs, Florence swings open the doors, hitting us with a cold gust of winter wind, revealing a large garden.

“Woah..” I whisper in amazement. My eyes widen as I take in the view.

“Yeah,” I hear Florence’s small voice next to me, “It’s beautiful, isn’t it? I used to come here with my partner every now and then. She planted these flowers. She graduated last year, so I’ve been maintaining them for her.”

“They’re lovely.” I remark, crouching down next to a purple flower near the doors.


that must have been a real cold wind to the face, purple flowers that's pretty it really does sound like they all just don't have enough friends and need sometime to just make some.

I look over to Florence, who is standing in front of a particularly large rose bush. Her eyes are full of joy, it’s admirable. I stare at her for a while, until she turns to direct us to sit on a bench. It’s located near the fence separating us from the ledge, eerie. I stand and follow her to go sit.

We talk for a while, completely ignoring any responsibilities we may have. Just enjoying eachothers company. It’s been so long since I’ve been able to do that.


You'd think that there wasn't even a care in the world when looking at Florence and the way she's acting but yeah that bench seems like a safety hazard that is waiting to just go wrong
also eachothers should have a space in between because it is actually two words each others

We talk for a while, completely ignoring any responsibilities we may have. Just enjoying eachothers company. It’s been so long since I’ve been able to do that.

“So,” I say, “How’d you wound up here? You don’t really seem like the type to do anything outrageous.”

“You’re right,” She giggles again, “I’m not, just happen to be unlucky. A friend was giving me a piece of gum and we just happened to be seen.”

“Which teacher?”

“Miss Everheart.” She responds, “What about you? Why are you here?”


this is so nice just enjoying peace and quiet and trying to get to know each other they need this more often really, but still studies are important to but yucky as well so yeah never mind studies.

“A fight.”

“A fight?” She echoes.

“Yeah, some dude called me Melanie to provoke me so I punched him, then that escalated and, well, you know.”

“Oh,” She whispers, “Is he here too?”

“You bet he’s here too,” I chuckle.


Oh no Mason you sound like a troublemaker, you shouldn't fight with people there is plenty of chaos already going around with the mist, although come on why can't people say your name right.

We sit in comfortable silence for a moment, before I ask, “How come I’ve never seen you before?”

She thinks for a moment, “I’m not sure, probably because we don’t share any classes.”

I click my tongue, “Yeah, that’ll do it,” I laugh.


being in different classes does suck sometimes when there is a person in that class that you end up getting along with most but I guess it just has to be that way

We sit for a bit longer before we hear the administrator calling all students to the gate over the intercom. We pack our things and head back down the stairs. We run into a few other students on our way, but not as many as I’d expect. I could have sworn more people were here an hour ago.

By the time we’re to the gate, the administrator has started re-taking attendance.


this person is probably suspecting that they did there studies like they were supposed to, sadly that's a no they didn't they sat and got to know each other because there isn't much time for that anymore.

“Melanie Corbin,” she hollers.

“Mason,” I hear someone say, then I look beside me to see Florence with her arm raised. “Mason Corbin.” She corrects. I look at her with extreme amounts of gratitude in my eyes, and hope she doesn’t notice. I feel a smile creep onto my face, and the urge to cry becomes stronger.

“Right,” the administrator says. Whenever she finishes, she sets everyone free to go home.

“So,” Florence says, “I’ll see you around?”

“Yeah,” I smile, “I’ll see you.”

With that, we part ways.


seriously they didn't get the name right again it's Mason it's not that hard to remember, aww Florence is sweet standing up for Mason like that now that's a true friend.

Overall: I did find this to be a relaxing chapter but again I wish that it answered my questions about your other two characters, to be completely honest at the moment in the current circumstance i almost felt like this was just a filler chapter, i'm really hoping to see the next chapter to see if I get answers to what happened to the first two characters though for sure.

anyway that's it from me

hope you have a great dawn/dusk/midnight

See Ya




Wr3n says...


Hello! To begin, thank you so much for the review! You are kind of right about the filler part (lol), this chapter was made mostly to introduce Mason as a character. Thank you so much for reading!




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