I really liked it...even though I do find it almost disturbing how easily I can relate to things like this. My overall favorite part was the second stanza
When the blade left light pink scars
That I knew would always be,
I kept them in plain view so
You would find them and yell at me.
There are some ways you could make this better. I don't think you have to repeat the chorus so often because I noticed when I was reading it, that by the end of the poem I was just kind of skimming over it. If you repeated it less, I probably wouldn't have. Also, in the last stanza, I don't think it was really neccessary to rhyme, though it didn't affect the poem too much. Like I said before, I really like it overall.
Points: 1040
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