This is really good so far. I'm not much of a reviewer of this kind of poetry, but I do think you could add emphasis by changing the line "I wish I were beautiful" each time. This way you could have each line mean the same thing, but something slightly different to reflect each verse, too. (like "I wish I *were* beautiful--" or "I wish I were beautiful!" See how its the same thing, but different too? This way it doesn't sound too repetitive).
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