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Country, Really?

by Stori


When I hear a country song,
One thought comes in my head.
Just one more twangy baritone,
And I'll soon be dead!

They like to sing 'bout heartbreak,
And other things the like.
I'll listen to more hopeful things,
Or else will take a hike!


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Thu Nov 24, 2011 5:20 pm
bagelbaby wrote a review...



When I hear a country song,
One thought comes in my head.
Just one more twangy baritone,
And I'll soon be dead!

They like to sing 'bout heartbreak,
And other things the like.
I'll listen to more hopeful things,
Or else will take a hike!


^ Short and to the point.. I LOVE it. I don't really like country music either, and they do always sing about heartbreak. It's gets pretty cliche after a while, and they all sound the same! Overall, great piece. I really liked it :)




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Sun Aug 07, 2011 11:51 pm



I like this. It's nice and short but the message is definitely clear, that country music sucks. I couldn't agree more. The rhyming is good, too. Good work. Keep it up.




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Tue Jul 19, 2011 6:35 am
LiesOnLies wrote a review...



When I hear a country song,
One thought comes in my head.
Just one more twangy baritone,
And I'll soon be dead!

They like to sing 'bout heartbreak,
And other things the like.
I'll listen to more hopeful things,
Or else will take a hike!


This was okay..it didn't seem like a song though. You also forgot to mention about them singing about drinking.




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Tue Jul 19, 2011 3:43 am
jolene15 wrote a review...



I enjoyed reading it but I do have a few idea how you could make it better.
Instead of saying When I hear a country song,One thought comes in my head. Why not try and put it like this When I hear a country song,One thought comes to my mind.

and here instead of-They like to sing 'bout heartbreak,And other things the like. why not try it like this They like to sing 'bout heartbreak,And other things they might like.

overall Very good poem.




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Sat Apr 09, 2011 8:25 pm
tuckerluvr says...



Pfft. I love country music. This is short and sweet, I like it and I wouldn't chnage anything.




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Sat Apr 09, 2011 7:16 pm
dregymayfield says...



This felt more like a poem to me than a song, but I liked it anyway. I can't stand country music...especially male country singers...it makes me cringe. I like some female country singers like Shania Twain and Taylor Swift, but that's it.

Good job




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Sat Apr 09, 2011 2:45 pm
silentwords wrote a review...



Ahahaha! I really liked this, it was short and sweet.

Just one small suggestion:

Or else#FF0000 "> will take a hike!
I would change the will to I'll. That's only my opinion though.

Great work! :)





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