Hey Sanareth! I'm Kat ^.^
So, as Snoink, I didn't really liked the first stanza. They're only questions, and those can be tricky in poetry. But! They can also be good, when the answers are something powerful and striking. As Amy, I believe you could have done so much with the answers. Also, because the questions are a bit cliché, if the answers were something really original it would have the shot of balancing the poem. Like this, I think it's not very strong.
The repetition of the beginnings of the second and third stanzas also doesn't help. It gets... boring. Sorry. But! There is this awesome stanza in the whole thing.
Please, spare me your plastic sorrow
Please, spare me your reptilian tears
Acting like this belongs on a stage.
Are you expecting a round of cheers?
I really liked this. It was, by far, the best part of the poem.
So, take another look at it and thanks for posting!
- Kat
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