Hmm...Nice piece there!!
You've got some pretty informative reviews already, so I don't really have much to add. I'm gonna say all that they said.
The randomness of the story is, of course as you planned it, the beauty of the story. No introduction to the character, the relationships to the other elements in the story, no prologue or aftermath, it does lend a sort of a "gone before you know it" quality to any creative work. Kinda like fast-food!! But it comes with its drawbacks too, as the other reviewers mentioned. It does not allow the reader to go deep into the character, and judge their actions apropos to the situation. We don't know her motives or how she's going to react either. It does leave the reader in the dark, but that's short story for you. But perhaps you could have added a few details about the situation there? Like why she came home to the bloodshed. That would lend some insight to her position. Nice portrayal of her thoughts as to what she should do next. That part really let the reader delve into the character's mind.
Enough said! Nice, short, yet interesting story. Leaves the audience hungry for more!!
Looking forward to your other stories...
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