Wow. This has some serious emotion going on. Now I'm guessing three things. Either your pessimistic (I'm with you), something bad happened and you are not to happy with "life" right now, or your just a really good writer. Considering this is YWS I'll swing towards the third one. This means you get into your writing. The reader believes what you say, and thinks you do too. The imagry was great if a little hard to follow. You were right on the edge of my brain shutting down from information overload.
I'm sorry if this isn't what you were lokking for. I saw a couple of grammer mistakes and the such but I prefer to review on the piece itself.
Overall this was good but remember what I said about overload.
Always/Writer
Points: 593
Reviews: 67
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