Hi, Liminality!
First, very good word choice. I loved the words like "compendium" and "textual". As I was reading, it was a little confusing but as I got more into it, I understood.
The description you used was fantastic. Such as "crackling tv set" or "blue night shivers". But, the line "I don't believe you....". Who don't you believe? A love interest, friend, family member, etc? I suggest adding something along those lines.
Please don't feel pressured to take this suggestion, I just thought it could make your writing better.
Keep up the great work, I'm excited to see new things you come up with!
Signed,
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