Sing.
Sing in praises of our wonderful Lord.
Dance.
Dance in happiness of our lives. use a different word other than 'happiness' It's very simple and plain. Try 'bliss',something to gain the reader's interest.
Cheer.
Cheer for the knowledge of the world. Do you mean the knowledge in the bible? Or the actual population's knowledge. If the latter, I do believe the world is quite ignorant and forgets our God too much. Try elaborating so this is more clear.
Write.
Write because if no one had penned the world’s first book,
Life as we know it would end. Wow, I loved this line. I especially like how you used the word 'penned' as opposed to something really boring like 'wrote' :]. Kudos.
Cry.
Cry because you know how much longer we have to go. This really makes me think. That's the greatest part of this ending, it leaves you with the poem on your mind. Really, congrats on that.
Keep up the good work and keep writing. God bless!
-KatTrain
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