Hey there!
Amaya is back here and ready to review 📚!
Buckle up, 'cause this is going to be a bumpy ride. I’m going to keep it short alright!✨
All in all
This party rocked, let's take a quick look!
As you said in the beginning, I read part one first before part two. So here I’m again leaving you a review on part two. ^^
I think it’s really interesting how you placed your protagonist from the modern times in the prehistoric times. I think with all the knowledge the protagonist has, he kind of is the leader (God) there. I’m really excited to see where you’re going with this.
You also did a great job with the second chapter and I like the elements you place in it. Or the people sniffing him to make sure he isn’t the enemy or a predator. Great thinking there!
I love the fact that he’s going to introduce them to fire, I hope everything goes well for them.
Areas to Improve:✒️
The following suggestions are merely to help you improve on your writing and not to offend you in any way. Feel free to skip these suggestions, if these are not what you aim for.
As I said for the first chapter also, try to take a risk and make your chapter a little longer. Think about adding some more descriptions and telling about your protagonist's background?
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Overall, I loved this chapter as much as the first one. And as I said before, I’m really excited to see where you’re going with this. All the best!
Have a nice day or night further! Keep writing! You are amazing!
Amazingly yours,
Amaya– Be yourself and keep writing! 📖🎉
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