Ooohh I LOVE this!!! The cryptic nature of this poem adds a sort of daunting and threatening feel so something we're all truly quite comfortable with. The subversion of what we're used to seeing into something that seems so /off/ is incredibly well done. The formatting furthers this.
"This foundation was brought to you by anything and everything." This line is very neat, and can be read into and dissected as a very interpretive piece (which is perfect for the point you're trying to make).
"factory smog starts to cover the interface". making the point that factories and progression and all of these advertisements clog and clutter our minds until we can barely think for ourselves; they're working together to stifle our individality and kill us.
"everyone else is watching, not seeing. why don't you lend an eye?" Again, incredibly well-written!!! Once again making the point that we ourselves are being clouded and fogged over by all of these new advancements. People profit from our confusion and addiction and willful ignorance- the encouragement in the last line makes this clear.
This poem is very well-written and makes its point in a way that's incredibly poetic and vaguely haunting, menacing. Overall, incredible!! I have no critiques. Have a lovely day!
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