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Please don't bump old threads, unless the author has specifically asked you to.
Fair enough! I didn't want to make it long and put people off.
Put it all in the original post, with another update.
Jack, I still liked it, but it seems like you were just trying to get points with the excessive add-ons. Put them all in the same, original post, and it will be much easier to read.
This was awesome!!!
LOL I loved the descriptions of the three and the comical eye brow raise
Awesome job, if it was a book i'd buy it.
This is begnining to ring me back to the time when I wasn't born or can even recall... nice job I liked this.... so did my dad he's chuckling... now he's rolling on the floor... now he's laughing hard.. softer... ... now he's not moving 
Yeah, i have to agree with brad.
This is pretty good...not my favorite story of all time but I'd like to read the other 9,000 words. 
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