] good poem, tee-hee!
] honestly, it seemed a little slow-paced, but it's cool. You have been descriptive, I like the way you paint a picture through your words (that's what poetry is all about!)
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] good poem, tee-hee!
] honestly, it seemed a little slow-paced, but it's cool. You have been descriptive, I like the way you paint a picture through your words (that's what poetry is all about!)
I would never dream of being unkind:) it is a little random and i come out of it thinking hmm something about leaves and then a beautiful metaphor about how great imaginations are. So maybe the first part doesn't need to be so long? And perhaps more explanation but then again i didn't really closely analyze it and i only read it once so maybe the true meaning was there from the start. It kind of seems like you just tacked it on at the end but yes i understand that can happen when you write poetry at the spur of the moment. Despite all this i enjoyed it from start to finish and i didn't get bored which is good for me. Nice concept and well done
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