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​Something I need to confess.

by EllieMae


Every day, I repent of sins I choose to make.

And every day I apologize

For praying insincerely.

The guilt consumed every moment of my life

The first time.

And the second.

And the third.

But by the fourth, I felt freedom.

Freedom to life, freedom to sin,

Freedom to continual and endless imperfections.

Freedom to everything I promised

I would never turn to.

I was washed over by a wave,

Which sucked me away with the current

Of the tide.

Drowning only hurts

Until you stop fighting.

Every day, I do things I regret.

And every day, I repent.

And every day, I don’t mean it,

And every day, I want to mean it a little less.

And every day, is every day.

And sin is sin.

Death will be death.

Freedom is what I have,

All I need to do is figure out

If it is enough.

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Woahhhhh Ellie at it once again!! Your poems always leave me speechless(in the best way)! Everyone on this site has a unique way of writing but your poems are always gonna have a special place in my heart! This poem is really quick and my mind seemed to want to read it at 100 miles per hour. Haha. :P Your poems are always really deep and thoughtful and carefully written. This one, especially, is like the character wrote it in a hurried way like they were short on time and there are so many possibilities of their backstory and their life that it makes me go lightheaded(with excitement of course)!!^^




EllieMae says...


Thank you for your lovely reviews!! You are so appreciated!!



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:D Thank you so much!



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I love this poem. I mentioned yesterday that it has a frantic tone to it.

My favorite line is

But by the fourth, I felt freedom.
because it shows that things (good or bad) take a while to get used to.

It's like you're breaking free from something, I'm not sure what. Religion? Expectations? Whichever it is, good for you!

A line that stood out to me:
Every day, I do things I regret.

And every day, I repent.

And every day, I don’t mean it,

And every day, I want to mean it a little less.


If you are repenting, but you don't mean it, do you actually regret doing the thing? I know that's how it is for me.

Overall, this is a great poem that makes it's readers think!




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OrabellaAvenue says...



Your poetry always makes me cry or want to cry, and it is so beautiful. I haven't read anything so relatable or something that touched my heart in a long time. Thank you. <3




EllieMae says...


Thank you for your lovely comment <3333 It really means a lot, Orabella! Wishing you the best!



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dm74 says...



Well this poem has sort of a frantic tone to it. Was that what you were going for?




EllieMae says...


Yeah, definitely! I wrote it with a lot of heavy and overwhelming emotions- that's what I was going for :D




I want to shake off the dust of this one-horse town. I want to explore the world. I want to watch TV in a different time zone. I want to visit strange, exotic malls...I want to live, Marge! Won't you let me live?
— Homer Simpson