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Lighterio and Candlet: Candlet

by EllieMae


My flame never burned so bright before I met Lighterio. I remember the night we met. It was as if I saw an angel, descending from realms of glory and peace in the sky. He slowly flew down from Heaven and before I knew it, his flame ignited.

"My love," he whispered to me, "I have never smelled a candle as perfectly spicy as you."

Those words swept me away. I melted, hearing him speak. His voice, oh his voice. It was perfect. I felt every word he said just as much as I heard it. His whispers filled me with a giddy feeling. Every time his flame glazed my neatly braided cotton wick, his eyes seemed to pierce deeply into the very center of my soul, the very center of the candle I was.

The truth is, I have never felt love so deeply before. My Lighterio is the only one who can make my flame burn as brightly as it does. One night, my soul was captured in a daze of endless daydreaming. I was missing mon amoureux greatly when I began to see his form descending from the bright, illuminated ceiling above me. His graceful flame appeared and he kissed my wick passionately. I prayed that he would never stop.

"Lighterio," I spoke softly, as he kissed me.

"Ma chérie," he spoke, with his charming voice, his French voice, that sunk deeply into my heart. I could hear him smiling as his words flowed into my ears. I felt as if his words became a stream of water flowing through one ear and through my heart. I loved it when he spoke French to me. It ignited a spark in me, and made me want to die, in a good way.

Between Lighterio kissing me, his fiery breath trickling down my spine, making my wick burn away faster than I could ask him to kiss me harder, I pulled away shortly to tell him the words that pressed deeply in my wax.

"We don't have much time, Lighterio," I whispered, "We both know I am melting."

This only made him kiss me with more passion. At a certain point, I became aware that I had not had the chance to breathe in a long time. I was so invested in Lighterio's lips meeting mine. Finally, he pulled away and said, "My love, you are hotter than the core of a star during its last stage of life. Let me burn you."

I didn't think that he quite understood the severity of our situation. But, in that moment, I felt safer than I had ever felt in my entire life. I felt warm. I was surrounded by his love for me. I knew that for the first time I could ever remember, everything was okay. And that was enough. I was melting, fast. I was dying, sure. But I was also learning how to live, in his arms. He burned my heart, at that moment. I decided it would be better to die than to burn another day, being lit by any other. I would rather die, consumed with his love than live without him kissing me and holding me and teaching me what it means to be appreciated for every minute of my day.

He burned me, alright. He burned me until I was no longer me, I was only the girl who he made me become. He made me a better person. I will never stop loving his smile, his laugh, and the way he whispered to me. I always thought that he didn't care I was dying, but I was completely wrong. If only I knew the thoughts that were going through his head, the things his mind made him want to do.

By the next week, I was shivering. I had burned so much that I was starting to feel empty. I was empty. It seemed that death was approaching me, faster than I had hoped. All I wanted was for him to kiss me and never stop kissing me. Though I was dying, I felt inner peace. I was prepared to die with his flame guiding me into a sweet, quiet, eternal sleep, as I was engulfed by his warmth. But then everything changed. Things were never the same again.

I smiled as I saw mon ange descending from the bright skies above. I puckered my lips, ready to receive his smoky flame and feel him kiss me like it was the last time. But, nothing came. He did not light. There was no flame. His face was pale, his eyes were shut, and his lips seemed cracked. His face looked peaceful. He was dead.

Oh, mon Dieu. He is dead. He is dead. He is dead. The only one who ever loved me. The only one who ever kissed me. The only one who ever held me is dead. The only one who ever made me feel safe and loved and every good feeling that I needed to feel is dead.

Before I could even shed a tear, I saw the human toss Lighterio into the pits of no return, the true pits of Hell on earth, known as the trash can. He may have been thrown into Hell, but I was dragged right down with him, mentally. I stood there, in shock, for a very long time. My eyes pierced the garbage can, in the distance, praying he would come back. My lip quivered. After a while, I started to cry, until I had no more tears left, until I felt like I could never hold a flame again. All that I could remember was his stale-looking, extinguished, empty face.

In that moment, I knew what I had to do. I moved closer to the edge of the counter. Normally, I would have been terrified to be this close, but nothing scared me anymore. I felt a consuming feeling of calm wash over me, as I looked over the edge. Life and death. Here one minute, gone the next. I felt Lighterio's embrace calling me from the land of death, or so it seemed. We live, and then we die. I breathed one last breath and whispered his name one final time.

"I love you Lighterio. I love you every morning when I open my eyes. I love you every night when I go to sleep. I love you with every beat of my heart. And I love you with my last breath. Let me come to you, Mon Ange. C'est cela l'amour, tout donner, tout sacrifier sans espoir de retour."

Why does death invite me, like you did, Lighterio?

To be continued...


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EllieMae says...



Here is part two! This one is from Candlet's POV. Fell free to read part one before, or after this. The order does not really matter. Part three will be posted probably today or tomorrow! Get ready for tragedy *evil laugh*

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The photos are amazing omg



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romantic candle and lighter photos >>>



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Hi Ellie!

What a cute and tragic story. :')

First of all, I absolutely love the photography element! It helps set the tone and ends up looking really cool.

It took me until the end to realize that it was a play on Romeo and Juliet, so bravo! I was pretty caught up in the candle romance. :)

So first, to talk about the romance. I really loved how you made it really passionate while only working with candle anatomy! XD It was very clever.

Between Lighterio kissing me, his fiery breath trickling down my spine, making my wick burn away faster than I could ask him to kiss me harder, I pulled away shortly to tell him the words that pressed deeply in my wax.

It seems like a lot of their relationship is the 'kiss' of fire, which makes a lot of sense. However, the timeline was a little unclear! I took a brief look at the first part and it seemed like that was a little more sequential, while this is a bit more interior on Candlet's part. So when we get to here,
I will never stop loving his smile, his laugh, and the way he whispered to me.

Even though we've seen Lighterio and Candlet exchanging a few words, I guess it still surprised me to have her thinking of "his smile, his laugh." To me, it seemed mostly like the kiss, since even Candlet said she barely had time to breathe or speak with him!

The reason I brought up the timeline is because this line might make a little more sense if there was a series of meetings rather than sort of one long kiss/moment. Not like we need to see a full evolution of their relationship, if that makes sense, but maybe just a little more to it!

That said, I do know it's meant as humor and I think the way you have it set up makes a lot of sense. :) I was just thrown off a little bit by her thinking of his smile and laugh and him whispering to her when that seemed like a small part of their relationship!

There was also a second big point that struck me, and that was I guess the more serious aspect of this story.
He burned me, alright. He burned me until I was no longer me, I was only the girl who he made me become. He made me a better person. I will never stop loving his smile, his laugh, and the way he whispered to me. I always thought that he didn't care I was dying, but I was completely wrong. If only I knew the thoughts that were going through his head, the things his mind made him want to do.

This paragraph surprised me quite a bit! The idea of Candlet changing wasn't really one I was prepared for, even though the fire analogy of being "burned" in the process of loving does make sense. It also feels to me as though being "burned... until I was no longer me" is a negative, but the narrator tells us that "he made me a better person." Even "I was only the girl who he made me become" read as pretty negative to me! A little eerie how her whole existence becomes fixated on him.

I don't want to read too deeply into your story if you didn't mean for that, but I guess it's just a little hard to tell if Candlet's trying to share a sweet sentiment or if there really is some sort of toxic element in their love. I got a little bit of that sense in the way she didn't have space to breathe, but it doesn't really develop throughout the story. So, I guess I'd be curious to see that idea a little more fully or have that complexity and doubt throughout more of the story.

I think the last two lines threw me off a little bit as well, "I always thought that he didn't care I was dying, but I was completely wrong. If only I knew the thoughts that were going through his head, the things his mind made him want to do."
It seems like a big deal to say he didn't care about her dying and then contradict it without showing how! When does she realize that she was wrong? Or is this retrospective, after she learns about his plan? (presumably she eventually learns?) I'm not sure what thoughts are being referenced in the last line either.

Anyway, that was the one thing to me that didn't quite mesh with the tone of the rest of the story -- a little bit of seriousness that doesn't quite get expanded, perhaps.

But overall, I just genuinely enjoyed reading this story! It was cute, funny, and also tragic, and it made me think about relationships in an interesting way. And again, I loved the photos.

"I love you Lighterio. I love you every morning when I open my eyes. I love you every night when I go to sleep. I love you with every beat of my heart. And I love you with my last breath. Let me come to you, Mon Ange. C'est cela l'amour, tout donner, tout sacrifier sans espoir de retour."

Why does death invite me, like you did, Lighterio?

I thought the last line hit perfectly, and I liked the bit of French, too -- I think it gives the story a little extra something. These last lines particularly feel more like they're invoking Shakespeare in the way they're talking about love and death, and it would be cool to see even more of that! It's been a while since I've read Romeo and Juliet, so I might've missed any references you included.

I'll be sure to check out the last part shortly! ^_^

-Q




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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we start with the spooky S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Candlet thinks that Lighterio is dead, but he’s not. He’s only asleep. She doesn’t know that, though, and wants to jump off the counter…

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow -I think that after Candlet says “I love you” at the end, there should be a comma, but that’s just what I think. You don’t have to listen to this.

Chocolate Bar - When Candlet approaches the edge of the counter…oh, how I fear what is to come! I hope that Candlet does not make the jump…I hope she lives…

Closing Graham Cracker -This is just more tragic than the last chapter! I think that the one after this will be even sadder than this one, but I must read it! I must read through the tragedy…

I wish you a lovely day/night!




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This was wick-ed good!




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Bahahahahahaha thanks so much for the support, that made me laugh! XD



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Roxanne says...



This is such a beautiful love story, beautiful really. But because it's such a tragic tale, I feel kinda bad that I laughed all the way through the chapter, 'cause of the cheesy romance between a lighter and a candle xD This is just awesome! :D




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Thanks Rose! And don%u2019t worry, it is meant to be a comedy so laugh away lol thanks for your support :D




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