Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Allistaire "Hunter" Sinclair (hence my screen name) is not normal. He has known this for many years, but has not been able to put his finger on what about him is not right.
One night, when he is but a mere child of 12, he will experience something that will change his life forever. Lured to a mansion by a haunting dream filled with blood and darkness, he will encounter beings that do not die...or are they already dead?
Within the mansion, he will be forced to make a decision that no one should have to make; kill your friends, or be killed by them?
Okay well I suppose it is quite clear this piece is meant to be some sort of overview of the plot here and really it works out fairly well as a bit of a synopsis/ blurb right here in terms of what it is trying to do. For that purpose, at least on first glance I think this one appears to be doing a pretty solid job at the moment. I certainly think its got enough going for it that as a reader I'm certainly drawn into the premise this seems to have here. There aren't too many sort of unique elements shining through here which is a mild concern but given this is a blurb of sorts that's not a massive issue.
Soo...well with what I have to go on here, I do believe you've managed to create something that certainly does have quite a bit of potential here as a story. The piece you currently have here I think does a good enough job to sell this story and make me want to read on and find out more, so all in all I think this is a pretty successful piece that you've got right here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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