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BreAkinG heArT

by Doxie00


Do you know what it feels like to have a breaking heart?
Not caused by love, but by a friend
Do you know how it feels
To see that you were led on
The whole way…just made to look like a fool

Do you know how my heart is aching
How I’m feelin so down right now
Once again, I’m reliving this nightmare
This nightmare where my supposed friends
Just let me down
Turn their back on me

Do you know how it hurts
To see your friend
Say shit behind your back
Being mean to you
Totally ignoring you
Like if you didn’t exist?

Don’t you know that feeling?
Please tell me you do
Man I’m not the only one
No certainly not

The way a friend just shows you
That other side of him you never knew
The way he shows you that
He never cared about you
The way he repeatedly shows you
That he doesn’t give one bit ‘bout you

Man my heart is breaking
DO you relate to this?
Often I ask myself
Why do I never see things coming?
How come I’m always the only one
In that bubble of lies
Which I so take for reality?



Man I should’ve known
I would never have taken a step to you if I had
Couldn’t you just spare me all this pain?
Did you really have to be so mean?
Are you telling me that you really don’t care?
What I feel, the pain I have to bear?
Am I supposed to understand
That the message behind your hurtful actions
Is to get lost?

Must I understand that you hate me?
That you don’t really care about me?
Must I realize you were a fucking hypocrite
Which I embraced with so much enthusiasm?

You know what?
I was ready to do anything for you
‘Cause I called you a ‘friend’
And I did do things for you
I sweated for your sake
Just ‘cause I never wanted to see you go through trouble
And this is how you thank me?
With a cold stare each freaking day?
This is how you say ‘thank you’?
By ignoring me all day?
Damn it, why why why why?
Why did I believe you?
Why couldn’t I see
That you were such a fake?

And now you trying to make me jealous
Goin’ after my friends
Showing them that face
Which in fact is just a farce
Yeah, I admit I am jealous.
No hurt.
But I’ll never let it show
I just can’t believe
That you would stoop so low






Man you’re breaking my heart
All over again
And you don’t even care
You just living your life as you please
You leaving me to bare
This sadness, this pain that nothing but increase

I remember those blissful times
Those times we joked and laughed
Do you really not care?
Is your heart really that black?
Can’t you see beneath my happy face
That deep inside I’m really hurting?
Damn it why the hell
Are you doing this to me?
I called you a ‘friend’
‘Cause you meant so much to me

But now I see that you never cared
In your heart I was never held
All those “I’ll miss you” words
Were just bullshit I was fed

Now I see the truth
It hits me bam in the face
How could you? Just HOW COULD YOU?
Honestly I don’t understand
Would you please explain
Let it be the last thing you tell me
Just how the hell could you…

‘Cause of you I’m crying
‘Cause of you I’m feeling like shit
Man go to hell
NO no please don’t

I don’t even want you to go through this
What I am going through ‘cause of you
It’ll pain you too much
Wait, that’s if you even have a heart

Something I’m now really starting to doubt
But I wont let you see me
In this godforsaken condition
To the world I’ll be the tough me
The indifferent one who doesn’t care
Your attitude offends me
More than that, it breaks me
But I hope you never know
How much I’m crabbing for you right now
I’ll forget you somehow
I.Will.Get.Over.You.One.Day




Yeah this is a promise
You found a way
To hurt me deep
But they say
That time mends a broken heart
It may seem forever
But mine will mend too…one fine day

One fine day
When the sun is shinin
And I’m just chillin
With REAL friends
I’ll look back at you
And scorn you. Yes I will
You lied to me.
You broke me.
But weirdly I don’t hate you.
I just feel disgusted right now.
I’m pretty shoked actually.
May the Lord God forgive you
For not forgiving me
For something so meaningless I did
Something which wasn’t even my fault
But that was something you couldn’t see
‘cause you were so blind
Something you couldn’t understand
Even though I thought you would
I overestimated you
You’re just like the rest of ‘em
The rest of your heartless peers…
And may the Lord God give me the art of forgiveness
To once again forgive someone who’s opened a hole in my heart.
Someone…yeah you.


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Sat Apr 09, 2011 11:35 pm
Yanni1995 wrote a review...



I love it! It's full of emotions and I could almost feel the anger and betrayal radiate from your words. Some nit-picks though.

    Do you know how it feels
    To see that you were led on
- this should end on a question mark.

    Do you know how my heart is aching#FF0000 ">,
    How I%u2019m #FF0000 ">feelin so down right now - feelin' and should also end on a question mark.
    Once again, I%u2019m reliving this nightmare
    This nightmare where my supposed friends
    Just let me down
    Turn their #FF0000 ">back on me - backs for plural

    Like #FF0000 ">if you didn't exist?
- you don't need to put if. "Like you didn't exist?" is much better.

    #FF0000 ">DO you relate to this?
- it's better if you use 'can'.

    [You leaving me to #FF0000 ">bare
- bare means 'naked'. I think you mean bear as in carry.

    I’m pretty#FF0000 "> shoked actually.
this should be 'shocked'.

Hope it helps! Happy writing! :)




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Sat Apr 09, 2011 9:04 pm
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Do you know how it hurts
To see your friend
Say s*** behind your back
Being mean to you
Totally ignoring you
Like if you didn’t exist?

If this former friend acted as if they didn't exist, would they even take the trouble of being mean? This doesn't make sense.

I.Will.Get.Over.You.One.Day
This should have a space after every period.

I’m pretty shoked actually.
"shocked"

And you should rate this 18 because of the F word. I think that's a rule.





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