Hey Rooh! 
What I liked about this poem was there was a really nice metaphor about the steep pathway and having to choose the path. This is a neat imagery that has been used by several really great poets and it's an awesome image! In fact, one such poem goes like this:
(Poem in the spoiler!)
Spoiler! :
So, you can see, this is a very popular image! Now, generally in poetry, you like to take a metaphor and run wild with it. So, it's not so much as listing off things rather than expanding an image and making it express what you want it to express. For instance, in your case, you used the imagery of the steep pathway to express the fact that things were hard and you had to choose where to go so you could find what you were searching for. Which is awesome!
Now, what you might want to try is to limit your questions. A couple of questions in poetry is not a bad thing! But the thing is, when you ask questions in poetry, they should be hard hitting and solitary, in order to make the best impact. Otherwise, they start to seem less important, which is not a good thing here! So, consider limiting the amount of questions you ask. See if you can express what you want in your imagery of the path and then ask the most important question that you want us to linger with.
Also! Just a minor issue... the steep path! Is it a downward or upward incline?
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