I do like this poem quite a bit! Daffodils are a very pretty flower, and a good subject for this poem. Now, contrary to the review above mine, I think the imagery is very well used. I would only advise using more, and with a greater variety. This poem could be a bit longer, and I would certainly love it more if it were. I do like the many flowers (the whole poem is like a pretty bouquet!), but it'd be nice if there were more things to enjoy besides the flowers. Also, the love in this narrative seems a bit childish. I think if it were more passionate, and maybe even a little seductive and alluring, it would be much more believable. There are plenty of plants you could use to express that!
Anyway, as of right now, I give this poem a 6/10. I think you could bring it all the way up to 10 if you really wanted! I like it now, but I bet you could make it better! You seem like a very creative and inspired writer, so use it all to your advantage! And if you ever need another review, or some advice, or just a kind word, I'm only a PM away!
- SOCKS
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