Young Writers Society

Wow, as I was reading this I was just like "woah". This piece is astounding. I love when you said "Here comes the beast crowned by the people,

Who flung that gilded door open for him?

A realization comes in with the dawn." because it made me think of the storming of the capitol, and how little was done to stop it.
And when you said, "Five days later, hope comes in

Riding the white wings of democracy

A golden chariot leading into the harsh,

Blinding light of the morning sun" it reminded me of how it felt in the days leading up to Biden becoming the next president. Full of suspense, and hope for a better future.
I love what you've done with this

Chancing a review,


I don't much care for politics, but I like the bitter taste your poem leaves in my mouth, it reminds me of coffee. (Though I'll review it as if I'm not aware if it's political leaning.) The first part is very suspenseful, what beast what monster is lurching forth? Can we stop it? I like the disheartening feeling that washes over me as I read. I like the line:

"two savages now grapple"

(Just how you relate all this to politics I may not like politics, and we may not entirely agree, but that doesn't mean it wasn't a job well done. ) I love how everythings seems to lighten at the end, ah , the war is over and your side won ultimately, rejoice!


I see no grammatical flaws that couldn't be stylistic choice. I see no spelling errors. I like the juxtapositions of ' but alas' and "despite it all' before you use the words ' the horizon fills with light.' You did well, keep writing.

Much love,
Shadow.

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So when reading this, some people have had slight misconceptions, I want to point out the date it was written, this was written in reference to the pain wrought by the 45th president and the hypocrisy in the idea that the 46th may solve it all by tomorrow but the idea that nevertheless, there is hope.

It's perfect how I stumble across this poem on Inauguration Day. I think these words painted beautifully and accurately how we all have been feeling these past couple of months. I liked how it was worded like it is a war because even though it literally isn't, it still feels like one. I think this is a great historical piece!

This poem is vey political, and I confess that I was worried it would be preachy nonsense. To my great delight, it wasn't! Instead, I got a beautiful, almost apocalyptically biblical series of images layered with meaning. I will choose to say nothing whatsoever about the meaning of the contents of this poem-your opinion is your opinion-but I suspect it is an exceptionally well written deepity: that is, it sounds deep, but really stems from a place of ignorance, much like the rantings of Kanye West, lol You are dealing with some massively complicated issues here, and you managed to deliver your ideals in a massively entertaining way! Thanks for the read!

Hiyo! this is a review for you amazing work! This is really well written and flows nicely. Its unique and Holds together well. Its worded well and I love that I can picture it while reading it. So thank you for sharing your work with the world of YWS. This was really good and Inspiring.

'A golden chariot leading into the harsh" had to have been my favorite line. It reminds me on the god Apollo for some odd reason. So thank you once again.