Hello there, Raven! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the possessed S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - This is a haiku on characters from your story “The Forsaken Race”, about what they’re all like.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - This is fine, I didn’t see anything to edit.
Chocolate Bar - I may not know who the characters are, but I like how you used animals to relate to their personalities. It adds extra details into how they’re like and gives an idea as to who they are.
Closing Graham Cracker - A haiku that would work well as an introduction to your story, I enjoyed reading this, with how the characters seem to come to life through words.
I wish you an amazing day/night! ^v^
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