Young Writers Society

There is a great story told in this poem. The rhyming was perfect as I read. I kept up with the beat, which was really good. A good beat means that the reader could read it well. You only have one minor error, which I'll help fix.

First line: "window sill" is "windowsill." One word.

I always find that word is always misspelled because it sounds like two words. Oh, well, what can you do about that? Any other way, I love the poem. Though it's short and bittersweet, it gets the message across.

Hey there, Scarlet here to review!

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This was actually a really good poem. Beautiful and gives off a grand message.


I do have a few nitpicks thought.


I think that some of the lines could've been lengthened.

On the window sill.
Its wings illustrious with thrill.

On the window sill, Its wings illustrious with thrill.

This was not to last.
Human intervention with a blast.

This was not to last, human intervention with a blast.

A wingspan wider than the air.
The skies had found its new heir

The prince had fallen; who was to be next?

I like this poem! Sad, but true.

Hello handsome.

So this is a really pretty poem. Which is unusual for you because there isn't any blood :p

On the window sill.
Its wings illustrious with thrill.
A wingspan wider than the air.
The skies had found its new heir.

This was not to last.
Human intervention with a blast.
Silver bullet through his rainbow chest.
The prince had fallen; who was to be next?