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This was a really mysterious and beautiful poem. None of it made much sense to me, however. I know plenty of poems don't make much sense, but I prefer one with a little bit of a story line or message. This poem, while stunningly gorgeous, *seemed* to have some actual meaning behind it, but I just got so caught up in the metaphors and the pretty language and the pretty rhythm and the pretty rhyme that I completely lost all sense of direction in this.
I wish this (a) wasn't double spaced as to allow the length and the scrolling to lessen, and (b) had stanzas. I read in one of the previous comments that you didn't know how to include stanzas. or that they didn't carry over. You see that edit work button on the side? Click it. I'd try to change your poem, because the lack of stanzas and the double spacing only adds to the dizziness, and perhaps stanzas would bring more meaning to this mess of symbols.
But It was very beautiful, and I feel like I learned something, even if I have no idea what I learned. You have great talent, you just need direction!
Just keep writing!
~Fortis
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