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Fri Apr 08, 2005 7:20 am
Liz says...



it's okay watching people trying to be arty with huge square white plates
chicken drenched in cinammin ivory rice and vibrant green bock-choy.

food has its fashion did you know?
right now it's trendy to have
tiny servings on gigantic plates sounds stupid to me and the whole eastmeetswest thing's cool too.

it's okay sharing calculators during maths tests
and getting ma error the whole darn time when i press shift cos.

my whisper's a whisper and nobody minds.
hey if i got the last question right
then great if not it's irrevocable it's invisible it's amazingly dix jours.

it's okay getting back french writing tasks which are littered with bright red
ticks words accents scribbles-thru hey at least "bien écrit!" is written bigger.

she's like am i forgiven it's not
like you lost my soul don't worry about it.
anyone else wouldn't give a damn if they lost my work geez, mr jones? give me a break.

it's okay kicking cans of passiona out from under my feet on the bus.
it's tess' problem now but she's wearing sparkling crucifix earrings and has honeystreakedhair.

she should be able to handle it.
a burst of sunlight i don't
welcome it i'd rather have blazing thunder so alive like my hate and the calender.
written: Monday 6th September 2004, 8:04pm.
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Sat Apr 09, 2005 4:12 pm
Matt Bellamy says...



I liked the style of this, it's so juvenile (sp?). The lack of commas and grammar in places created something that otherwise would have been crap if the whole concept wasn't so well thought out and different to what I've read from you before, yet kind of similar. This stands out from the rest of your work, so keep experimenting.
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