Young Writers Society

I'm not sure if this is lyrics or poetry.



how many times do i have to fall
before she realises i'm too heavy
to be caught
how many times do i have to die
before she knows harsh words
and serpent tongues just don't hurt anymore
how many times do i have to cry
before she fucking realises i hate her so

kiss me on my lips
but don't press, don't push me back
how many times do i have to remind her
to kiss me on my lips

how many times do i have to stumble
before the pavement starts to run red
with the blood and the tears and the sweat
how many times do i have to look her in the eyes
before she knows i'm a brick wall
of conversation and feelings entwined

kiss me on my lips
but don't press, don't push me back
kiss me on my lips
never let go
never let go

I think this is poetry, but wow, another sad poem, *cough cough* I wonder why you wrote this? Anyway, it's great, he he, I like it.

I'm not breaking a law or anything commenting on this am I? anyway I thought this was more of a poem, but I guess you could turn it into lyrics, just by re-doing the format. This is a really sad, and beutiful poem.

"how many times do i have to fall
before she realises i'm too heavy
to be caught
how many times do i have to die
before she knows harsh words
and serpent tongues just don't hurt anymore
how many times do i have to cry
before she fucking realises i hate her so"

I really like this stanza starts the poem off very well.

I have nothing to say. It's a beautiful poem. Uh...I guess it could use some punctuation but it works without it and yeah I think it's poetry as well.

It's both. The last stanza I can almost hear as a song ending.

This is beautifully written, i think.

I agree with Mesh. Exactly what she said.

Beautiful.