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Mon Jun 15, 2009 1:24 am
Carlito says...



CLOSED FOR NOW

Spoiler! :
Let's just cut right to the chase....

Favorite things to review:
-Romance (Novels and short stories)
-Action/Adventure (Novels and short stories)
-General Fiction (Novels and short stories)
-Lyrics

What I won't review:
-Fantasy
-Sci-Fi

Anything else I'll give a shot but no guarantees it'll be good :)

For novels:
1. No more than two chapters at a time.
2. If you want me to review select chapters, not the whole thing, give me a brief synopsis of what's going on.

For everything else:
1. Links are great, but if you don't provide a link tell me the exact name of what you want me to review so I can find it in your portfolio. Don't just say "please review my story"
2. No more than two requests at a time. Once I finish those, you can ask for more if you feel the need.

Generally here's how my reviews go. I go through and quote things that I don't like and get real nit-picky and try to explain how to fix it. Then I give my general impression on characters, plot, and your overall writing.
For lyrics it's sort of the same. I go through and nitpick things and then give my overall impression of the rhyme/rhythm, and song as a whole.
I may be kind of harsh.

Any questions, feel free to ask!
Thanks much :)

-Carly
Last edited by Carlito on Sat Apr 30, 2011 3:43 pm, edited 6 times in total.
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Mon Jun 15, 2009 6:15 pm
TexanWriter says...



Wanna try photography? "Outside", please, if you have the time.
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Mon Jun 15, 2009 6:54 pm
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Done! :)
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Fri Jun 19, 2009 2:31 am
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I've updated this with some examples of my reviews. :)
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Fri Jun 19, 2009 11:24 am
Crouching Tuna says...



Please review my prologue to my novel, even though it's a bit fantasy-ish, that's not the only content of the story.

topic49035.html

Thanks a lot!
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Fri Jun 19, 2009 3:56 pm
Carlito says...



Finished!
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Sun Jun 21, 2009 11:52 am
*writewatiwant* says...



Carly, would you take a look at a first chapter of my new novel?

Invisible [1].

It isn't as tacky as it sounds :P

Thanks!
*Kat*
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Mon Jun 22, 2009 1:30 am
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Fini! :D
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Mon Jun 22, 2009 8:50 pm
Twit says...



Sitting in a Rainbow [i]

Even though it's in fantasy, it's more alternate history than anything else, and at this point there's almost nothing fantastical about it. *puppy eyes* Plz? :D
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Wed Jun 24, 2009 10:00 pm
Carlito says...



I did my best...sorry if it's not that good...

Your avatar captivates me :) I could stare at it all day! :D
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Thu Jul 02, 2009 2:09 am
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Any more? I've got a lot of time to kill and want to review your stuff! :D
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Tue Jul 07, 2009 2:27 pm
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topic50380.html Other Fiction, PG-13.

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Fri Jul 10, 2009 3:37 am
Carlito says...



Sorry it took me awhile but I'm finished :D
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Sat Jul 11, 2009 8:00 pm
rlw92 says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic50580.html
Hey mate I wouldn't mind getting my work revied so if you have sonme time on your hands take a look. If not dont worry it's all good.





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Sun Jul 12, 2009 4:46 pm
Carlito says...



Finished! :D
It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.

Ask a Therapist!
I want to beta read your novel!


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