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Sat Aug 06, 2011 5:00 am
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Sat Aug 06, 2011 5:19 am
paintingtherain97 says...



This is accurate and good but kind of dry. I realize economics are dry and difficult to make exciting, but maybe you could try tospice it up using business metaphors. Otherwise, it was really fantastic, with good variation and mechanics and everything. :D
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