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Fri Jul 13, 2007 9:38 pm
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Fri Jul 13, 2007 10:31 pm
Rydia says...



Wow. Now that's vivid colouring. She looks rather manly in a way. I think it's her face. Perhaps you should give her some eyelashes and such. Other than that though, you have a cool style. The right arm, the one just visible at her side, looks really stiff so a little work on that wouldn't hurt and the bandanna is odd but the skirt looks cool and the hair is really unique. It's not bad. The hand is really accurate and you've got to love that tattoo. Also, nice checked theme.
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Fri Jul 13, 2007 10:46 pm
Alice says...



The coloring is great, almost abstract. I'm going to resist the urge to explain that one. But I can't help but wonder what she's doing. It looks like she's about to run which leaves the rest to the imagination about what the whole drawing is about. I think it could use some more background though.

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Fri Jul 13, 2007 10:48 pm
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I get the vague idea she's dancing actually. Probably due to the checked floor...
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 12:14 am
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I think it looks like she's dancing too. I really like the coloring style, it's really neat, but for the position her legs are in, it doesn't look like her torso is twisted away from the viewer enough for us to be able to see the bottom of her feet (sorry, not sure how to word that). The colors and the contrast are really nice. :)
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 3:51 am
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 4:15 am
Emerson says...



The guy is so adorable!

The girl looks like she is in a really weird position though...
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 4:40 am
Alteran says...



The guy looks great. The girl however is a bit off. it's her arm. Her forearm and upper arm are not connecting correctly. It might help if her arm was bent a little.
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 4:47 am
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How are they not connecting? I can't... quite see it.
How would bending her arm help the connection? Blah.
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 5:16 am
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It's not that they're not connecting, it's that it doesn't look natural. It looks stiff and odd. See how the guy's arm is just a little bent, That kind of minor bend will make her arm more natural looking.
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Sat Jul 14, 2007 12:17 pm
Rydia says...



I love the guy. I wish I could see more of his face but the outfit is really cool. Why not do a coloured version of him too? I bet it would be really good.
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Sun Jul 15, 2007 3:37 am
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You guys are free to make line art for him.

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Sun Jul 15, 2007 5:48 am
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It's very nice. A bit random though. Kinda confused but it looks great :)

I love the little people. They're so adorable.
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Sun Jul 15, 2007 6:36 am
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the checkeredy guy up a few posts with the hat I want to own is freaking awesome. I pretty much want that entire ensemble. You need to ink and color him, and then you'd be freaking awesome too. As far as a crit goes his nose looks a bit funky. And his lower right (my left) leg could use tweaking. But otherwise: sheer thumbs up
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Sun Jul 15, 2007 11:48 am
Rydia says...



The latest one is pretty girl. It's nice to see the girl in a more casual outfit. It really suits her. The guy is good in that one too but he looks rather sinister. Can't wait to see more!
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