Hmmmmm, I'd say 9/10. I like the plot, but werewolves is a little unoriginal. I think you should come up with something different to be plaguing the humans. But that might just be me, and other than that, very good idea.
Yes, I'm back. Okay, I just started outlining this, so it probably isn't that good, I just wanted an opinion. Sorry, it's kind of long.
This man was seven years old in 1828. His crazy father had murdered the younger sister of these three men. He pleaded insanity and was sent to a mental institute, which he lived out the remainder of his life in. The men didn't believe he was punished enough, and decided to go after the one thing that would really hurt him, his son. A wizard knew that the man were plotting to kill the boy, and felt bad. He made this pendant, seemingly unknowing to the three men. As long as the pendant wasn't destroyed, the man could not die. It also drastically slowed down aging, so in 2008 the man is only 26 years old. The man does not know how, but the brothers have followed him through the years, and they know all about his pendant and how to destroy it. In an attempt to save himself, the man goes on a journey from the streets of New York to the oceans of Hawaii to the deserts of Australia, but when he finally finds his old house, he finds that centuries ago, the brothers tracked down the wizard, tortured all the information out of him, forced him to make them all pendants, then killed him. The only hope for the man is a letter written from the wizard's long lost daughter. In order to save his life, he must go on a wild goose chase in a race against time. He has to hope that this daughter is alive, knows how to destroy the brothers' pendants (all the pendants created have a different ritual to destroy them), and isn't just a ploy to lead the man into a trap.
Also, I don't know whether I should start with him in '08 and gradually explained what happened so the readers don't really know his childhood events or that he is immortal, or have his childhood as a prologue or something. Thnanks for the time.
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