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Sat Mar 12, 2011 10:28 pm
HostofHorus says...



No, you don't really have to beg.... But it might make me smile if you did??! Tehe! Anywho....

Hello! !t is me, the human host of Horus! I am here to give you a God's review of your work. So scroll through the item's I will review below, and let me know!

Poetry:

I will review any poetry under 15 stanzas. Sorry... I'm not a gigantic fan of long poems.... They actually kind of make me angry, or make me cry, like my avatar. Or like my avatar used to.... Now you'll just make my all seeing Eye of Horus cry...

<----- (does that point to it? Oh well...)

I love poetry though and you can plan on me giving some good reviews. These are my favorite to review. So bring them on!


Short Stories:

Any short stories under a 5000 words. Sorry, but I don't think I can review the novels in the way you would like me too. Nor would I be able to do them in a timely fashion... SO short stories all the way.

How I review:

I will review by the following.

-State the comments and other generals stuffs in this boring black color.
-Make corrections in this blood looking color because everyone notices blood.
-Give suggestions In this pretty purple color because purple always feels left out.... And I feel bad for it, so I am giving it a chance to be used a lot!
-Explain the things I like in this sort of maroon color because maroon is amazing.
-Give you my overall thoughts at the end in some random color if I feel like it.... (The color part I mean....)

If you want to see some of my reviews here are a few links, they are pretty much all of poems though.... Also realize I will focus on any particular aspect providing you specify it when asking (or hopefully begging) for a review.

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Now why am I doing this...? Well because I want to get some of those perty little badges, and I have always believed that reading others work helps one improve! So, get down and beg! :pirate3:
Last edited by HostofHorus on Sun Mar 27, 2011 7:16 pm, edited 1 time in total.
HostofHorus Author, Poet, Dreamer, and Expressionist.
http://JRSStories.com
Stories Poems © As of January 1st 2014

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Mon Mar 14, 2011 9:49 pm
HostofHorus says...



Hehe... Seriously, no one?
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Stories Poems © As of January 1st 2014

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Tue Mar 15, 2011 1:20 pm
Twit says...



This isn't a short story, but it's just the first chapter of something longer, and you don't have to review the rest at all... It's not on the forums anyways, so you can't, lol. Only you don't have much going on here, so I thought I'd ask.

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If it goes against your reviewing principles, then just ignore it and me, lol. :)
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Tue Mar 15, 2011 9:58 pm
HostofHorus says...



Complete!
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Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:04 pm
Jas says...



Hey there! I was wondering if I could request a review :D

Part One: viewtopic.php?t=77182

Part Two: viewtopic.php?t=77524


Thanks sooo much! :D
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~




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Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:40 pm
HostofHorus says...



Finished part one, I'll try and hit part two tonight.
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Stories Poems © As of January 1st 2014

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Wed Mar 16, 2011 4:00 am
HostofHorus says...



Finished!
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Fri Mar 18, 2011 4:27 am
HostofHorus says...



Anymore?!
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Fri Mar 18, 2011 8:19 am
Hecate says...



YES! Please, please, please review this poem for mee?
Please?
Amen.

Not sure if that's the begging you were looking for.
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Fri Mar 18, 2011 7:19 pm
HostofHorus says...



Oh yeah, I finished that a while ago =P
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Sun Mar 27, 2011 1:30 am
HostofHorus says...



Anyone?!? Come on, bring it on!
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Sun Mar 27, 2011 3:35 am
Jas says...



viewtopic.php?t=76844

It be a poem. THANKS! :D
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~




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Sun Mar 27, 2011 7:09 pm
HostofHorus says...



Done
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Stories Poems © As of January 1st 2014

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Sun Apr 03, 2011 6:14 pm
HostofHorus says...



Still available for assistance... :)
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 12:37 am
cannoncomplex says...



Okay, Can i ask for a review. The story is generally R18 for graphic violence. If you don't mind:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic78650.html

Can I ask you to look at the story and telling how well the structure, style is, and the characters.
I have a bad reputation for grammar. Its my second language so I know that there are grammar problems here but can i ask you to focus more on the context of the story and check if it is well written.

Thanks
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