Hi, I needed the first chapter of my story to be reviewed. It is fantasy but there is a prologue to go with it, the prologue is short but it kind of helps what happens in the first chapter not seem random. Here are the links. Prologue Chapter One Thank you, and be as harsh as you want.
Fan-fiction: The famous poem of Edgar Allen Poe written entirely new with a brand new story but I keep the contextual of the nevermore and the remembering in each verse.
In the poem The Raven, the man is plagued with having to always remember his beloved Lenore. The Raven is a symbol of that thing that always follows us and stays in the back of our minds. Where-ever he goes the raven follows saying "Nevermore," as in nevermore will he see her ect. I take a very different approach so you should see that when you read it!
No, it's not that you didn't succeed. You accomplished a lot, but, if you want to touch people, don't concentrate so much on rhyme and metre. Think more about what you want to say instead of how you're saying it. — LCDR Geordi La Forge
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