A rough pitch:
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What I'm looking for:
I want you to read the whole thing and I want your thoughts. This is the first draft so I'm more interested in big picture thoughts (characters, plot, pace, etc.) than nit-picky things like grammar and word choice. (Feel free to comment on those things if you feel the need but I don't want that to be the main focus).
You can give your thoughts as you go, thoughts after each chapter, or your thoughts as a whole once you're all done. Whatever is easiest for you. I will have a lot of questions for you about what you think of x when you're done. I need you to be super honest. If you hate it, please tell me (and why). You will not hurt my feelings.
You can read the first part of the first chapter here. This is all that will be posted here. I am very protective of my work because it is my intention and desire to traditionally publish someday. Therefore, if you want to read it, I ask that we work through email or PMs.
Let me know if you have any questions or if you would be interested in helping me out! I can read something for you in return if you are interested!
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