I have a story that I want to change to make it better.
I have kinda finish it but I want to expend it. So far I have like 35 pages of it.
My main character is a 16 years old boy and he find himself in another world where there are no humans, just anthropomorphic animals who have evolve on Earth. He's stuck in the body of a fox who was (executed by removing his soul from its body, leaving a blank mind). He try to find books about "mind transfer" and stuff like that to try to return to his human body. along the way he help a young vixen who's a princess who run away from her kingdom. He discover that these animals are as much human in their attitude and they can be stubborn. He get a lot of obstacles in his quest and also find love.
Since he's 16, how would he be able to express his desire in a world where love his forbidden?
How would he react to all the deception he face? The lie and coverup?
The dilemma he face, stay with the one he love or return home and lose her? Maybe also a possibility that she can go to the world of human, but how would she react to a world that slaughter, hunt animals for the sports, for their furs? How peoples would react if they discover that she's a real fox, not someone dress like one?
I don't work much on my story or stories, I try to look at stuff on how to develop a character but I left a lot of case empty since he's a kid.
The deception of someone he like and trust is helping him in his quest but also leading him into dead end to prevent him from finding a way home because it would expose a secret group who's trying to raise/create a army for countries who would pay a lot for soldiers who would follow order and never stop.
Time pass and he grow more mature, how it would change his life once he get back to his human body? example, he's stock a good 20 years in the body of a fox, he grow more mature, well he became an adult and return to his young body. His mother, friends school family would notice a big change of character.
Nothing are fix. I'm here to see if I should make change and what I need to change.
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