I wasn't exactly sure where to put this but this seemed like the best place... Anyway, this is an excerpt from a fanfiction that I'm currently working on.
The squeeze of the blood pressure cuff around your bicep pulled you from sleep. A quiet groan left your lips and you blinked the remnants of a dream from your vision. The room blurred into focus, a voice somewhere near your head apologizing for waking you.
“Sorry, Y/N-ssi.”
Something just feels like it's missing? I'm not really sure what but it doesn't sound right to me. If you guys could figure it out it would be greatly appreciated. (any feedback would be appreciated honestly) Thank you in advance!
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