Happy Review Day, wisegirl22!
One thing I must tell you first: This was funny but interesting at the same time. The way you added both together great! I also loved this whole article - type idea. It was, well, genius . Yes, that's what I'd call it. Genius. I've honestly never seen anything like it! You literally gave me images inside my head of a baby falling from a tree top. That imagery was just right!
I would say, though, that this could use some more development and improvements. Maybe you could list some more things that might influence your child, plus stretch this out and make it longer. I loved this article but I was really sad when it ended. Keep it going! Make it longer! Or, you could make another article like this. Add a sequel to this one. Though this was shorter, I find it quite enjoyable.
I love the way you made up these influences. If I were to write this, I would've never thought of that. I bet this used a creative mind and humor.
Everything else on this was great. I definitely could use some humor and laughs today, and these piece just brought me it. Plus, this is my first article here that I've read. And it was great! This deserves a pat on the back.
I just think you should consider either expanding or adding a sequel to this. However, it's your choice and I don't want to push you or anything. Thank you for sharing this piece, I really enjoyed it!
Bye~
Sunset101
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