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Leg ache (parody of 'Headache' (parody of 'Eyelash'))

by whatchamacallit


Went running
                                                                          without
                                                                                    runners
I know
           stupid
Now leg hurts
Because of                                 foot
                                                                   arch
Woke up
Middle of night
S    t          umb
                          l     ed
                                                                                           into kitchen
Grabbed Advil
Swallowed
Dragged back to bed
Waited
Hoped
                                                                                                                                          Didn't work
Still awake
                                                                                                  3:60 AM
Oh wait
Doesn't exist
                                                                                                      Going crazy
                                                          
                                                                      Send h-                       


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Fri Sep 01, 2017 5:34 pm
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I laughed at this. It's funny! I love hyperbole in poetry.

The formatting and the subject (hurting your leg) creates an interesting duality in the poem. The dramatic nature of the former and the normality of the latter conflict. I love especially how you've ended this. The omission of the 'elp' in help is a nice touch!






Thanks! Have you read Headache or Eyelash? Eyelash is the original, by Sheytato, I think.



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Mon Aug 28, 2017 7:32 pm
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I love how it feels like a diary entry from someone who is having cognitive issues, it makes me think he might be having deep leg thrombosis or something along those lines and might have had a heart attack or stroke at the end. He must have not moved around in a long time and then suddenly became active, I'm guessing. I really liked the poem! Short and sweet and to the point, it's a kind of talent to give someone an entire background story through so little text.






I'm glad you liked it! It's actually nothing so morbid, just a leg ache I get from my lame feet arches :( I like to be dramatic, though.



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I don't know why It made me post twice but I cannot delete it






That's ok, just a glitch :D It seems to have gone.




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