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🥀🫀Valentine Hearts🫀🥀

by vampricone6783

*I know that Valoween is over, but I thought it would be fun to share. This will be under my folder titled “Some scary-ish stories”. I hope that you enjoy!*

The saccharine sweetheart

Blood is red

Bruises are blue

I’d carve my heart out

Just for you 🫀🥀

The fallen Cupid

Roses aren’t always red

Violets were never blue

There’s only person I despise

And that person is you ☠️🩸

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31 Reviews

Points: 323
Reviews: 31

Sat Mar 02, 2024 12:27 am
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herbalhour wrote a review...

Hello vampircone!! i'm here to review your work with the YWSeption review. Lets get into it!


Register On To YWS

huh...? what's YWS?

Not many things to say for first impressions- These are fun spins of the original poem though!

Hop On To Forums

woah! this is really fun!

Welcome Mat

A lot of great imagery, but the part that was most striking was

i'd carve my heart out

just for you

Art & Photography

The image of
blood is red

bruises are blue

added a more sinister touch that i really liked!

Will Review for Food

My favorite part was by fat,

theres only one person i despise

and that person is you

that was just too relateable

First Review

huh? whats a review? how do i do one?

not much to say here! just maybe not capitalizing and.

Read Some Works

hmm...  I like these poems by alliyah... and these stories by Spearmint!

if you want to write more poetry-- i reccomend reading some by @creaturefeature, @envy, or @fatherfig!

Staying On YWS

I think I like it here!

so yeah, i really liked this and look forward to reading more by you!


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Reviews: 5

Fri Feb 23, 2024 1:16 am
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RandomLady33 wrote a review...

I love how you did so much with so little, it's a beautiful poem that tells you so much without telling you anything. I love it!

My favourite of these 2 would have to be The Fallen Cupid, I adore the simple but affective way you showed the speakers feelings. (Plus the emoji's adorable.)

I also love the desperation and earnestness behind The Saccharine Sweetheart, "just for you." Brilliant work here!

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Sun Feb 18, 2024 1:24 am
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writeriam says...

I really like the rhyme scheme in this poem. As well as the emojis since they convey a emotion that you were trying to present. In addition I loved the twist you put on the original poem. Oh and also I love these types of poems!

vampricone6783 says...

Glad you liked it!

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Reviews: 6

Sat Feb 17, 2024 11:41 pm
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DevilBeMyDarling says...

I used to love making these up too~

vampricone6783 says...

It%u2019s fun. :>

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