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🥀🫀Valentine Hearts🫀🥀

by vampricone6783


*I know that Valoween is over, but I thought it would be fun to share. This will be under my folder titled “Some scary-ish stories”. I hope that you enjoy!*

The saccharine sweetheart

Blood is red

Bruises are blue

I’d carve my heart out

Just for you 🫀🥀

The fallen Cupid

Roses aren’t always red

Violets were never blue

There’s only person I despise

And that person is you ☠️🩸


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Sat Mar 02, 2024 12:27 am
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herbalhour wrote a review...



Hello vampircone!! i'm here to review your work with the YWSeption review. Lets get into it!

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Register On To YWS

huh...? what's YWS?

Not many things to say for first impressions- These are fun spins of the original poem though!


Hop On To Forums

woah! this is really fun!

Welcome Mat

A lot of great imagery, but the part that was most striking was

i'd carve my heart out

just for you


Art & Photography

The image of
blood is red

bruises are blue


added a more sinister touch that i really liked!

Will Review for Food

My favorite part was by fat,

theres only one person i despise

and that person is you


that was just too relateable


First Review

huh? whats a review? how do i do one?

not much to say here! just maybe not capitalizing and.


Read Some Works

hmm...  I like these poems by alliyah... and these stories by Spearmint!

if you want to write more poetry-- i reccomend reading some by @creaturefeature, @envy, or @fatherfig!


Staying On YWS

I think I like it here!

so yeah, i really liked this and look forward to reading more by you!


-herb




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Fri Feb 23, 2024 1:16 am
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I love how you did so much with so little, it's a beautiful poem that tells you so much without telling you anything. I love it!

My favourite of these 2 would have to be The Fallen Cupid, I adore the simple but affective way you showed the speakers feelings. (Plus the emoji's adorable.)

I also love the desperation and earnestness behind The Saccharine Sweetheart, "just for you." Brilliant work here!




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Sun Feb 18, 2024 1:24 am
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writeriam says...



I really like the rhyme scheme in this poem. As well as the emojis since they convey a emotion that you were trying to present. In addition I loved the twist you put on the original poem. Oh and also I love these types of poems!




vampricone6783 says...


Glad you liked it!



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DevilBeMyDarling says...



lol
I used to love making these up too~




vampricone6783 says...


It%u2019s fun. :>




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