Young Writers Society

I think it is definitely short. But I don’t think you’re a try hard. You are very good at choosing words and making a story worth the read. I really like reading your other stories bcs there is a lot of suspense and mystery which is something I really like in books. And also I like that the stories can continue to something a lot more and how you include backgrounds to each characters instead of leaving it to writing the background of several characters in one story.
I personally like the hunt for doing the research for your characters by looking through the many stories you’re written for one character Im interested in for that moment. Your stories are worth the read! You are not a try hard!!
And so what if people say you are? If writing is something you enjoy then do it!!

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

Once,there were two people named Annetta and Jacob Morison.

They had three children,Conrad Morison (Who was an adult),Philippa Morison (An over emotional teenager,in their opinion) and three year old Lily Morison.(Annoying,but she didn't bother them).

Annetta and Jacob owned a circus,because it helped them make money and provide for their family.They couldn't have time on things like feelings and talking to their kids.

No time for that at all.

So,if anyone complained,it was their fault.

Too bad they didn't realize what would become of their kids if they didn't notice them..

Hi vampricone - I'm back for another installment of the Magic, Murders and Lies!

I think in the future it might be better for you to post a few of these short ones in one post. It's completely up to you, but that way you utilise your points more and don't spend them all to post something so short. I'll of course review it nonetheless, but just something to consider.

They had three children,Conrad Morison (who was an adult),Philippa Morison (and over emotional teenager,in their opinion) and three year old Lily Morison.(annoying,but she didn't bother them)

Hi @vampricone6783 .
It’s @BeingRivy, I know you think this isn’t your best work the one above, but I actually think this could work great as a hook. I mean I read some of your stories, but I forgot their title of those stories. I love the one about the villain making a loophole of (once you enter the exit, you come back to the place you need to exit). And there’s another one I loved, where someone lived a life, died somehow, and woke up from the dead in 2021 or 2022 or something.
I want to write good stories like these too. You are super good at it.
But for me, the problem is, it’s hard creating what the characters. It is sooooo hard to create what they want and need, because you need to write everything the character wants. And ask them a billion questions for the whole story, and forcing them into what I want in my story. What can I do?
I’m sorry this is a horrible review, because it has no solutions to fix the story. I think every story is so perfect, that I let myself down and put in even more stress. (and force and fail myself to make my story perfect at a certain deadline.) What do you think? And I want to make story ideas that stick into someone’s head. And I feel like I’m not one of them. 😩
I feel left out of everyone else. And in order to fit in and create stories, I have to make reviews so that people will think I put in all the hard work in reviewing. My biggest flaw is finding the mistakes in even the best stories. Any tips and ideas to be the best reviewer? Because I still wan to follow my dream, but my parents and teachers (aka support circle) don’t know what to do to help me, so I have to rely on strangers to help me, or I won’t get the help I need.
Hope you understand. Pleazzeeeeeee enjoy my review.
From, @BeingRivy .