Young Writers Society

Hey Tiny! I caught a few things that were a little off so I will show them to you.
As MJTucker said, in this sentence, “In fact, it’s just the opposite, but I decided to give it a try,” you are just repeating what you already said. That was basically all that I caught so in every other way, it was well done.
I really liked the first sentence. It really hooks the reader in and made me want to know what you meant by that. I found it neat how you described the journal. It was very real and relatable so that’s another factor that will help attract readers. Good job!

Hi there tinybookfarie! Tuck stopping by for a short review

It was the last sentence I had written after I just finished my very first diary entry. I never really thought that I would be needing a diary. It just never occurred to me to write down my thoughts and feelings.

It kept every single feeling you ever felt, and if you kept good care of it, then those memories and emotions would be conserved until you would open it up again and read it all.

Little does my grandma know that none of my emotions and memories are all butterflies and rainbows

Little does my grandma now that none of my emotions and memories are all butterflies and rainbows. In fact, it’s just the opposite, but I decided to give it a try.

If this is an epilogue, why are you posting the epilogue first? Usually an epilogue comes at the very end of a story. Maybe you're thinking of prologue?

Second, in the second paragraph, I recommend recognising the "she" as you grandmother.

Third, in the first paragraph, there is just a small punctuation thing that is unimportant but I might as well mention it. In the sentence "You see, I always kept them to myself so when my grandmother gave me this small book with blank, lined pages, I didn’t know what to do with it until she told me", I recommend putting a comma after "myself".

I have a tip, but you don't need to heed it - it's just my personal opinion. I think it would be more worth the time of the reviewer, especially in terms of chapters, to provide a post containing a larger passages. If you plan on keeping your chapters at this average length as of what you have already posted, then I'd say maybe post two or three per post.

So far so good! There really isn't much more I can say about it since there isn't yet a story to follow and critique on, but you have an excellent start. Keep writing!