Radrook here a once again
to offer some suggestions.
Apologies if I offend.
It isn’t my intention.
Please feel full free to cast aside
all things you deem not helpful.
But if you do be sure its true
by being extra careful.
That having been said:
Thanks for sharing this poem which makes broad declarations. I like the way that it begins by demanding that someone tell the speaker certain things are true. I like how it then introduces the next part by declaring that lying is wrong and then proceeds to contradict all the previous statement. In other words the person responding considers those things lies and since lying is wrong the responder will not tell the first speaker those things are true.
As simple as the poem might appear, it raises some very profound philosophical issues. For example, is lying always really wrong? Or are there special situations when lying is the right and decent thing to do and telling the truth is the immoral indecent thing to do? If we examine the issues meticulously as we are supposed and as is done in basic classes on ethics, we will find that there are indeed moments when telling a lie is the right thing to do and telling the truth is indeed the immoral thing to do and should be avoided.
The same applies to all the other statements that the poem contains. They have been examined philosophically and there are grey areas which cannot be simply dismissed with either a yes or a no. Because of this the poem’s intention must be considered to be a means of indicating something other than what is being stated.
To me it is simply a demonstration of how people will differ in opinions without feeling any need to provide evidence to support their claims. In other words, it illustrates the illogical tendency of mankind or that reasoning is merely a tool employed to support emotion. In that sense the poem succeeds magnificently.
It also reads smoothly and the lack of traditional punctuation did not detract from its message in my case. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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