Young Writers Society

Thank you, Charm. I want to read your poem again and again, for it feels like I am reading the whole story in one moment, or maybe it is just one little scene, but it's so much bigger than - does it really matter what - it is just big and so soft. I must say, I've been hearing a very gentle voice read me your poem. I guess, your avatar played its role in this. I can feel it and picture it; and, what I find a true miracle, it feels like the narrator, the imaginary human, is someone I've liked for a very long time. Like a character of a favorite cartoon from the childhood or something like that.

Hi! Space here for a review. ^^

I know this was written a year ago, but I just thought it was so pretty that I couldn't not-write one. (Did that made sense? XD)

There's not much to say, honestly, I just think it's so beautiful and the metaphors mixed with imagery somehow forms it into a perfect little poem.
I also understand the meaning of the poem and I think it's very emotional and supportive.
"I'll let my lonely lost tears water them
so soon I'll have a beautiful garden, too." I think this line (though I might be reading it completely wrong honestly) shows that sometimes to get to good times you have to go through hard times and sometimes the hard times help you get there..? If that makes sense.

Overall, this is a wonderful poem.
Great job!

-Space

Hey there! It's LadyShadows!
I absolutely ADORED this poem! It gave me that heavily symbolic feel to the poem. It was true though, as everyone plants seeds in their lifetime. That's how your soul grows or wilts. This was real. And beautiful. This is life. Keep writing. ♥

looking at the title i just thought of something hilarious

like the other way of planting a seed

do you get it

im so deceased right now lmao

damn marmalade

woah tumblr



kidding, i like it

I really enjoyed this poem. Immediately I think of somebody going through depression. I took this as maybe the seed is an antidepressant, of course that's just my interpretation. You're very detailed which makes it easy to visualize the process and understand this is a poem about self-recovery.

Hi, Gymnast2801 here with a review!
First off, this poem is really good! I like how you referred to a garden as sort of the growing of the mind. I epetaully loved the verse, "and I'll let my lonely tears water them". This verse is really wonderful and very creative-as is the rests of the poem.

The only thing I would like to point out is:

and though my thoughts aren't colorful
I think there should be a coma after "colorful" but I don't think it's really needed so you could just add it if you wanted

fields of flowers like his or hers
Perioid after "her's"

Well, that about sums it up! Great job and keep writing!

Hey!! This work is just stunning... use of words is justbso well I can actually feel what's happening. The point of using tears to water the plant is just great. This poem gives positive hope and I like it a lot. Each line of this poem has twists. In the starting lines you plant the seed and next moment you forget about it... this point is so well versed. Hope to see a beautiful garden very soon. Your poem just made me forget all my blues and just sail with the wind blowing with your poem. Wish to see more work from you.
- Akshata

Hey there! So I'm filling my house up with plants at the moment and when I saw the title, I decided this was definitely today's review.

Specifics

1. I'd actually like to see the first two lines switched around so that you start with the description of the location and give the emphasis to seed - we always remember most what comes toward the end of a sentence. So:

In the dark, soft dirt of my mind
I planted a seed

I also don't think you need to have 'dirt' to carry the metaphor and that 'recess' would sound nicer or even 'hovel' which takes the best from both worlds.

2.

and soon I had forgotten about this.

But little by little green sprouted through
adding color to my dead garden