Young Writers Society

I love this so much! I have a sibling who is bisexual and was afraid of coming out because he thought we wouldn't accept him and we told him we would see him the same. This speaks out to me because my mothers friend is gay, one of my best friends is lesbian and I'm asexual. So I love how you've shown that love can be shown regardless of gender! I don't see many gay, lesbian, bi etc. poems on here and the fact I found this one and its so well written is amazing! I love everything you've done with it, the way it rhymes at the last word, and the way they speak is so fascinating because you can hear the pain and love they feel. My favourite line is the last one ' Love is a heaven that death can't replace.' because it is so substantial because it overthrows death and pain and shows us the more powerful things in life. . I'm really sorry if I've gone on a long rant, but this really was amazing! I don't see anything really to give you advice on but maybe you could clear up who was speaking in the 7th stanza? Either that or its obvious and I'm just slow! I do know who is speaking though so maybe a little explanation like describing him as he says it? Hope this helps!

I absolutely love this! I'm new to this website, and this was the first thing I've read on here. I felt every word you wrote and connected with this poem on a whole other level. I started tearing up at "Julian looks up at him, up at his broken smile" and was a crying mess from then onwards. I can't wait to read your other works.

This piece is absolutely amazing. I myself am a hopeless romantic and a poet. This price just combined them both! I loved the plot and it really touched me. It was a strong and inspiring piece. Your word choice added to the effects of the story. Very well written. I did not notice any grammatical errors. This made your piece much easier to read! Your way of rhyming wavered a bit, but it did not take much away from the piece. It was a magnificent read, and I am very ecstatic to read more from you! This type of writing is my style and I hope to see more like this. Keep writing!!

Wow. First of all, I must say, you really have a way with words. I love the line that says "In each other's arms, they are home at last." I also love the line that says, "love is a Heaven that death can't replace." You have me almost in tears with this mood altering, heart shattering piece. I love the simplicity of your writing. You figured out how to make something so simple into something that was extravagant. You should really be proud of your writing. I know sometimes it can be a blessing and a curse, but in your case, it is definitely a blessing. I can't wait to read another piece by you. I know this is supposed to be a review, but I don't have anything to say to critique your work. Just keep up the good work and have fun! Happy Writings! 'Tato out.