Eleven, my friend It is nearly time to
tuck you in and say goodbye to your house on
Memory Lane. It won't be easy
but it is time to say goodbye. The eleventh friend I've left behind.
You're not the only one. Shall we take a stroll down Memory Lane?
Hey Hannah, Lee here for a short review! Straight off, I love the format of this poem; it's very aesthetic and doesn't feel forced. Good on you! I also like how you've made use of enjambments throughout the piece to led it a good sense of continuity. I have just one nitpick After "my friend," there ought to be a comma, don't you think? Either that, or the following line shouldn't begin with a capital letter. This isn't a huge issue, of course, just a small observation. I enjoy the general sense of sadness in this poem; i can relate to losing friends. This was a lovely read! Good job and keep writing! ~Lee
Sunflower here for a quick little review!Okay it's alway the short poems or stories that end up getting me going: "Wow people are amazing with what they can come up with!". Quite honestly I loved this, it's short it's simple it's wonderful! Maybe it's the music I'mm listening to to help add to the wow factor I'm not sure but either way I love this and it deserves some recognition! I could probably say more about it but I don't think I need to the beauty of the work speaks for itself! I hope you have a fantastic day/night and keep on writing! Bye!
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