I'm back once more. <3
First off: I really love the formatting! The gray highlights initially serve as a great juxtaposition to the rainbows you're describing, and then seem to fit the speaker perfectly once you transition into that second stanza. I also love how you indented the last three lines of each stanza - when I was reading your poem, I read through those groups of lines faster than the preceding ones. It made it feel like a whirlwind of thoughts and emotions.
As with your other poems, your imagery is great and your writing lacks grammar and spelling errors. The only critique I have is that I didn't entirely understand the meaning of the poem until I looked through your portfolio and briefly skimmed "three, loving colors". It was clear from the descriptions you used here that some sort of comparison was meant to be made between the speakers and the rainbows, but it was hard to tell what exactly that comparison was. If you ever go back to this poem, I'd add in more details that clue the reader into the meaning of the poem.
Other than that, I really loved your poem.
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