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I know very little about flower symbolism, but you did a great job conveying the meaning of the symbolism you were going for with the colors and flowers - thanks to the rest of the stanzas, I could easily understand the story of your poem. So props to you for that!
Imagery is a key part of this poem, and I can happily say that you got it down perfectly. I usually struggle with imagining what I'm reading, but your poem had so much description that I barely had to try. The formatting definitely helped with that. Even when there was sudden breaks in the middle of lines (like between "back" and "molars"), I was still able vividly imagine what you were describing.
This isn't necessarily a piece of constructive criticism, but this poem almost feels like a ramble in some parts. There is punctuation to slow the poem down, but it still feels like parts of it are spoken in a single breath. If that's what you were going for, great! If not, you might want to break apart some of those longer sentences.
Overall, awesome job on this poem! I'm going to head off to another one of yours now and hopefully get it reviewed before I have to head off for school.
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