Your heartbeats echo through test tubes and beakers.
You told me that salt complexes don’t cry,
so I've have streams of HCL running down instead.
They say all that glitters is not gold,
but gold is dull in its pure form.
Nothing glistens.
All my oxygen is binding into esters.
I can’t breathe.
You’re trying to make more by breathing backwards,
Turning CO₂ and water into that needed oxygen.
But you can't force your lungs to work in reverse.
Our “perfect” chemistry was flawed from the start,
Like all scientific theories are.
Like everything in the universe is,
because electrons are never perfect,
and nature never ever tells her secrets.
You have this flawed theory of love,
It won't react favorably,
and the products will spill all over the table.
There is no solution.
Hey there...!
I absolutely loved reading your poem. Science is so, like, logical, and poetry is more art, more heart- felt. I never thought a combination of these two could ever work, but you just did that and did it so brilliantly! This piece was a joy to read. The second stanza is my personal favourite. It is so beautiful. Keep up the great work!
science an writing, i had no idea you could combine these two, beautiful though.
i studied science so i can absolutely relate with most terms but i'm sure there's a typo in the first stanza........right?
in the third stanza, i don't just get it, i don't think oxygen would bind on it's own or even with carbon dioxide to give Esters. Esterification is a much more different process.
apart from that when i went on, i fell into the rhythm of this and i enjoyed it.
My best line: "there is no solution", you couldn't have said it any better.
the title drew me in and it didn't completely disappoint....Good job dear!
keep writing!
Bee
Your heartbeats echo through test tubes and beakers.
You told me that salt complexes don’t cry,
so I've have streams of HCL running down instead.
All my oxygen is binding into esters.
I can’t breathe.
You’re trying to make more by breathing backwards,
Turning CO₂ and water into that needed oxygen.
But you can't force your lungs to work in reverse.
Ah, science and writing; my two favourite things in the whole wide world. This poem combines them neatly in a way one might not expect them to. I loved the way you also wove in the subject of love which, at it's most basic, is a series of chemicals. Not that I think you meant it that way. I do always love it when I read something with a connection to a passion of mine. You just went for it and that was great.
I would never have gotten away with trying to do a poem about science so you are more skilled than me. Well done for pulling it off.
Hi Fort!
So I won't be able to give you a detailed review on the sciencey type things, like niteowl. I'm no science major. But I am an English major!
Your heartbeats echo through test tubes and beakers.
so I've have streams
This is a nitpick, but I think this would sound better without "all" at the beginning of the line.All my oxygen is binding into esters.
Here's an opportunity to use another science term. Photosynthesis is what came to mind when you mentioned CO2 and water. I think it would be wonderful if you said something about photosynthesis and plants. It would be another nice image to bring to the reader's mind.But you can't force your lungs to work in reverse.
I would say "a" instead of "this." It sounds better.You have this flawed theory of love
Hi there fortis! Now since I work in a lab I think I have to review this.
Overall, I really like this. I think you use the science imagery very well and it makes for a really unique poem.
You told me that salt complexes don’t cry,
so I've have streams of HCL running down instead.
Our “perfect” chemistry was flawed from the start,
Like all scientific theories are.
Like everything in the universe is,
because electrons are never perfect,
and nature never ever tells her secrets.
You have this flawed theory of love,
It won't react favorably,
and the products will spill all over the table.
However, that said, I love seeing people write science-y poems and I think you did a lovely job. Keep writing! 
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