Young Writers Society

No plagiarizing. - Snoink

Yeah, I too think that the title was kind of bland and just brought the whole poem down. But, the whole poem was really, really good though.

i think this was a very interesting poem...however i believe that the title kinda brought the value down...it just didn't mean that much to me, really. i'm not one of profane words...which is just me, of course. anyways, the poem itself was great.

*cocks eyebrow* when did i say it was techno?

Wow, good, that was great.

That did seem like lyrics, instead of a poem. Kind of like a song. But mostly, (isntead of slow tempo said by Avalon), to me it seemed more of a fast rock/punk kind of song.

Hmm, it does seem like a guy running away or girl... thats why it is named staccato slut. Very good and deep, and dark.

I think its an /1o job....damn it, my eight key doesn't work so bare with me, will you! Eight/1o.

aha! I see what you mean. It doesnt exactly..make sense because I'm guessing i left out the bits you'd need to know for it to make sense! Hah..this is me...always only time enough to tell half a story because everyone stops listening. And I appreciate the song lyrics comment, I try and put music to things every once in a while, but never seems to work. I'll edit it, with the bits you need to know.

It's basically a guy, who always lets me go for another girlfriend - and how I don't want to care about them, and still 'fool around' if you catch my drift.

I'm not the best at telling stories. Not a lot of practise due to above reason. I generally give up, hah.

Thanks for pointing that out.
Cheers!

i don't read this as poem, i read it as lyrics. i can actually hear it playing in my head with a slow-ish tempo and lots of bass and a gravely voiced angry -girl rocker singing. awesome.

youre so bloody loyal that there's no hope for me

and i'm tired of losing you