Young Writers Society

The Mandalorian had me thinking so many things, but all of them are </3

The first line had me cackling. I especially blame the "tried and failed" part because Star Wars could've just ended and everything would've been fine. I feel the same way about the The Mandalorian too, which is probably a very unpopular opinion.

Anyway, I haven't written a fanfic poem in a few years. I'm not exactly sure if this can be considered fanfiction because it doesn't use the characters in that way, but it sounds good and I'm sure you understand what I mean. I agree with the stanzas representing each episode and the thoughts beforehand too because that organizes the setting, and it's easier to avoid specific parts if someone has missed the episode or is unfamiliar with something.

I think it focuses on before too much at times though. Everything that was said in the first three stanzas could potentially be wrapped into one summary because the poem is about the show, not the problems with Disney and previous things they've done. I understand there needs to be some base to start out with and work with as you write, though.

Then, we are introduced to the actual narrative of the show, which is "Mando found Baby Yoda, with the help of Kuiil." It's correct to what happens in the show, but a few steps of introducing who the characters are is missing. Personally, I am very familiar with the show and understand what you are saying, but others might feel left out; I do doubt people who haven't seen much of the show would read this because of spoilers though.

(Baby Yoda is the best too, and I will get into a rather heated argument if someone were to disagree at all with that statement, haha!)

But yes, good poem if someone is familiar with the source you're writing about. I found myself agreeing a lot of statements and remembering fond scenes that happened, which is a good feeling to create in poetry. I don't recommend it to people who haven't watched it though, for obvious reasons and the confusion that might occur.

Well done! <3

Haha! This is great! I love how you didn’t just sum it up but put your own heart into it as well. Based off of your name and poem I can see you have excellent taste! :p the tatooine/ nostalgia thing got me! Every time I hear tatooine I just think dangerous races and looking wistfully at the horizon..
Anyways, I thought this was a good poem because of the story you told, turning a fast pace series into an epic poem, and that you told your poem as your reactions to it as well as summarizing it. I think that one way it could improve is to give it more of a rhythm as you read it, so your poem is as fast-paced as the movie. Great poem! Keep writing.

Samk642 here for a review!

first off, must say. This is the way!

the stanzas being divided by the episode they represent was a good idea. reading about the nostalgi--- sorry, Tatooine, makes me believe you are an old-school fan. at the minimum a prequel time frame, although my suspicions feel it may be older.

the prose itself is fine. I feel that the wordiness of it is detracting in some ways, but the point of this passage is not to be some eloquent soliloquy, but rather an ode of joy to how the spirit of star wars was returned in this show. just as in the actual movie series, and in the show itself, it doesn't need to be the most polished excellent piece ever. the poem and the show connect in that the heart of star wars is a story being told by passionate creators. it is this trait that elevates any creation from good or acceptable to great! just as in the poem he addresses how Disney had missed its mark in trying to cash cow star wars, so do writers forget. it is not the quantity of words written. it is the heart and quality of the effort produced.

in short, hats off to you good sir for capturing what it means to be a star wars fan

Yay! It got the literary spotlight!

I love it!