fall vibes B)
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i often walk in the forests; the leaves cascade down,
falling, gliding, and eventually find their final resting place:
the ground. each one piles onto the other, gently caressing
one another-- a blanket of foliage.
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in this eventual downfall of each leaf, there is less a sense
of finality and more a sense of a deeper intracacy as they
learn to love one another, and finally become part of what
they came from: the roots & the tree, by extent.
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now, if leaves were sentient, would they want to grace eachother
with protection from wind & heavy rainfall? or would they
each have an individual idiosyncrasy like all the humans do;
would they be selfish & brutal & unkind to all the other leaves?
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see, humans are like that; we often are a brutal species,
gnawing and tearing apart every "other" leaf: red, orange,
yellow, brown, green. and we forget our greater purposes,
we forget how to give back to the dirt we walk on.
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i walked down the street today: the air was cold but not
unforgiving. it was cold in a warm way; it made me feel like
i was somewhere beautiful, in the moment, and i watched as
a maple leaf flew down to the roots of the tree, fufilling its
greater purpose in life: to return to the soil it came from.
I really enjoyed reading this and I think you did great job! I like how it slowly shifts from just talking about the leaves to showing the link between them and human behavior. It shows the train of thought really well making it easier to understand.
The message of the poem fits my own world view perfectly and I always enjoy reading how people find new ways to bring it up. The imagery is so beautiful. The leaves give to us by giving us oxygen and they give to earth when their time comes when we are nothing more than just parasite on this planet using freedom as a reason to hate forgetting the greater purpose.
a maple leaf flew down to the roots of the tree, fufilling its
greater purpose in life: to return to the soil it came from.
Hai :3
I love this poem so much!! The way you write about nature feels like it has this deep sense of life and interconnectedness, like youâre really tapping into how the leaves and trees are part of a larger system. That imagery of the leaves and the humanization is so soft and almost intimate!! Itâs not just about nature, itâs like youâre making us reflect on humanity and our connections too!! That's great!!
The contrast you build between the peaceful falling of the leaves and the brutality of humans is so good ~~ Like, it makes me think about how humans complicate things that could be so simple, like how the leaves just accept their place in the cycle of life. But we, as humans, tear each other apart. I love the way you ask if the leaves would have their own personalities or quirks like humans!! Thatâs such a cool thought!! It kind of made me pause and think like, oh, maybe nature has it all figured out more than we do. That's a very insightful point of view to write from.
now, if leaves were sentient, would they want to grace eachother
with protection from wind & heavy rainfall?
i walked down the street today: the air was cold but not
unforgiving. it was cold in a warm way
Hey friend! First of all, this poem feels so mature. I love seeing all the different styles that you can write with, which all form this one sense of you. I absolutely adore this poem, because of how rich and detailed and beautiful it is. I feel like you can interpret the poem so many different ways, and that everyone who reads it can find different meaning in it.
see, humans are like that; we often are a brutal species,
gnawing and tearing apart every "other" leaf: red, orange,
yellow, brown, green. and we forget our greater purposes,
we forget how to give back to the dirt we walk on.
i walked down the street today: the air was cold but not
unforgiving. it was cold in a warm way; it made me feel like
i was somewhere beautiful, in the moment, and i watched as
a maple leaf flew down to the roots of the tree, fufilling its
greater purpose in life: to return to the soil it came from.
Hey century, coming in with a review for this amazing poem!
My first impression of this is how FALL it was. This poem is dripping with autumn vibes! You accomplished that.
Your imagery is honestly amazing here. I can feel that clear picture of the leaves falling down. Itâs so cool! The message is also amazing and so philosophical. I would have never thought about leaves like that.
I also love the line where you talk about being cold in a warm way--I think thatâs something a lot of people can relate to. Overall, I loved this and canât wait to see more!
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