Young Writers Society

i see not the wrong & righr
only my mistakes

Hey Herb, this is a lovely visual poem! I can tell you put a lot of careful work and effort into creating such a well-done white out poem like this. I thought I would leave a review with some thoughts of the overall piece and contents Let's jump right in!

You start with the word N O. It isn't just together, but the letters are spread apart and capitalized. This gives me a bold feeling, almost a demand and perhaps regret over something. I really admire how you used a lot of individual letters to form words, over larger spaces, instead of just saving words. This really made it your own poem.

I liked how you touched on 'the only of our kind'. Your poem gives me a sense of being lost or discriminated. I will admit, the last third of the page was pretty hard for me to read, because of how spaced out. sometimes I thought I knew what words you were saying, but then there would be letters that I couldn't fit anywhere, haha! But I did like the simplicity of the phrases.

The ending 'regardless of one's feelings' meshes pretty well with the overall content of the rest of this white out poem. While reading, I felt like you were making a point of inclusion, despite differences. Overall, lovely poem Herb! Seriously, the visual aspect of this makes it so so fun to look at!! Keep making these!!

Your friend,
Ellie

Hiii there! Coffee here to drop a challenging review on an interesting, talented piece!
Hey Herb!! How are you?^^
Now, back to the topic!
JeeEZz, this was hard to read and interpret and I am still at a loss for words! I’m not a huge fan of this style as this is a bit TOO difficult to read in my opinion(or I may just have bad eyesight). Personally, I wouldn’t read this type of stuff because it gives me a hard time and I struggle to understand what it’s actually meaning to say to me, what is the piece trying to say? I would just get hung up on that. But, I like this style too since it’s quite unique and honestly I’ve never seen it before since I came to YWS and joined the Free Verse Club!
So, I’m torn, lol.
I can’t really ‘review’ this work because I don’t understand enough to pin point sections but I’ll try my best!!
I love the line:

“on whether or not to call”